Fragmented II

This is another piece of the puzzle that will hopefully one day be a part of my short story. I’m still really new at this writing thing and am constantly thinking about how I can build my characters and the story, so if you’ve got any thoughts, comments or tips please feel free to let me know! If you haven’t read the first bit, you can read it here.

Anyway, just a really short thing I wrote; enjoy.


Oli goes out to the balcony for a cigarette, with a towel around his waist.

Devin: You still smoke?

Oli: Are you gonna tell me how to live my life as well now? Just like everyone else?

Devin gets up and begins to dress himself while Oli continues with his cigarette. Buttoning his shirt, Devin looks over at Oli’s back and then at the smoke coming out of his mouth…the mouth he kissed only some hours ago. He pauses for a moment before continuing to dress himself. Oli returns to the bedroom as Devin is pulling up his trousers and turns Devin around to face him. He leans in for a kiss but Devin hesitates, pulling back slightly.

Oli: Don’t.

Oli grabs Devin’s neck to pull him closer to himself, kissing him forcefully. Devin gets really tense for a brief moment, but quickly submits to Oli’s force, their tongues intertwining. Oli brings Devin down onto his knees.

– End of scene –

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